Pet Peeve Alert:
Run-on, and on, and on, sentences.
I get it, but….
You have so much fantastic detail that must be shared because it is crucial to the story and the understanding of the scene and the character and grabbing hold of the reader’s attention, and as we have all learned the first sentence or two are the key to the hook, but please be realistic and decide on a simpler hook that does not leave the reader breathless waiting for a PERIOD!
No, I am not an English teacher on the hunt for writing fauxpas. However, run on sentences are a painful and exhausting read. Yesterday, I read the back of a novel, a full paragraph description, which was one very, very long sentence.
This type of writing looks unprofessional. It screams that it has not been edited by a professional. And is just plain annoying.
The very first paragraph of the book was written in the same manner, with 14 lines comprised of two ghastly long sentences. While this may be very important and detailed information, crucial to the story, there are better methods for crafting the message.
What is a “run-on” sentence, you ask?
A run-on sentence occurs when two or more independent clauses (also known as complete sentences) are connected improperly.
EXAMPLE: I love to cook I could cook everyday.
One common type of run-on sentence is a comma splice. A comma splice occurs when two independent clauses are joined incorrectly with just a comma.
EXAMPLE: I love to cook, I could cook everyday.
There are other types of poor splicing examples, but you get the drift. If you notice independent sentences within your sentence and a lot of “and”s, commas and semicolons holding it all together, it should be fixed. There is a simple remedy. Periods.
Too much of a bad thing will have readers “running” away from your story, no matter how interesting it may be.
Hope this writing tip helps!